Read the attached document in its entirety. It contains a REAL correspondence between a state official and a frustrated homeowner.
After you have carefully read their letters, post a well-written, original analysis on each writer's 1) style and 2) tone. This should be done by midnight on Monday, August 23rd. Then, by midnight on Thursday, August 26th, you need to comment on or respond back to at least two of your classmates' comments.
Reminders:
1) Style: An evaluation of the sum of the choices an author makes in blending diction, syntax, figurative language, and other literary devices. Some authors’ styles are so distinct that they are easily recognizable. We can analyze and describe an author’s personal style and make judgments on how appropriate it is to the author’s purpose. Styles can be called flowery, explicit, succinct, rambling, bombastic, commonplace, incisive, laconic, etc.
2) Tone: Describes the author’s attitude toward his or her material, the audience, or both. Tone is sometimes easier to determine in spoken language than in written language (you can HEAR a person's tone of voice). Considering how a work would sound if it were read aloud can help in identifying an author’s tone. Some words describing tone are playful, serious, businesslike, sarcastic, humorous, formal, ornate, sardonic, somber, etc.
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The state official has a very well organized statement. He uses a formal language in order ot get his point that the person has not issued a permit to build the dam. He is trying to inform his reader that if he doesn't remove the dam or get a permit, legal action will comence. His tone is businesslike, formal, and serious. The official uses the right type of wording to tell the reader his problem. Mr. DeVries is completely angered by Mr. Price letter. You can easily tell that he didn't like that fact that he was threatening him. His tone is serious and very sardonic. He uses a lot of repition due to the fact that he is angry. He uses the wrong 'dam' throughout most of the letter. Mr. DeVries doesn't like the fact that he did that and tells him he should do about the bears instead of telling him about the dam.
ReplyDeleteOne word in the title of 'The Dam Letter' is spelled wrong!
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DeleteDavid Price style in the letter was professional and straight foward.He used the correct terms to tell the land owner which law was being broken.Mr.Price had a serious and bussiness like tone.He also sounded accusive to the landownerfor being irresponsible.
ReplyDeleteStephen(the land owner) style of writing was repetitive and purposely use the word dam in the wrong context.The landowner's tone is angry and frustrated with mr.price for being accused of making the dam.In the letter she also tranferred some of the anger into sarcastic/rude humor towards the state offical.
Mr. Price writes in a formal style and clearly states his problem with support. His letter is strictly for business purposes and he had no personal involvement.
ReplyDeleteMr. Tvedten style was sarcastic. He used the word "dam" in the wrong sense. He repeated this throughout his whole letter. His tone was angry. He was mad that Mr. Price accused him of building the dam when it is actually beavers.
David L. Price's letter is a more formal tone because he is writing the letter in means of a company. David L. Price's style is explicit because he is giving straight facts to Stephen L.Tvedten about the dams in the pond.
ReplyDeleteStephen L.Tvedten's style for his letter was sarcastic because of how many times he says "dam" and how he uses the word also. Stephen L.Tvedten's tone is kinda an annoyed and angry mix he is annoyed and angry that the DEPARTMENT OF ENVIRONMENTAL QUALITY is trying to blame him for the dams in the pond. when in fact the beavers where the ones that created the dams in the first place.
the state offical has a good structure. He uses alot of formal language to get his point acras. I belive that the style is very formal. Also, Mr. Tvedten style was sarcastic, because he used the word "dam" in the wrong sense. He has an acusing tone as well, beacuse it seems as if he is acusing the landowner as being irresponsable. Mr. DeVries uses aloto reoetion due to the fact that he is upset about the fact that he was thretaned.
ReplyDeleteThe style in which Mr. Price writes the "Dam" letter to Mr. DeVries is very intellectual.He cites the place in which it says that Mr. DeVries is violating. He also uses formal and respectful language. He is serious and he means bussines. His tone is very professional.
ReplyDeleteIn the other hand. Mr. DeVries tone is very humorous, sarcastic and unproffesional. His style of writing is like if he was writing a close firend that he gets along with and doesn't show any proffessionalism. His language is offensive and it makes him look ignorant.He makes a good point thugh.
The first letter, which was from the state official, has a very formal tone. Even if we had actually heard the state official speak, the tone would still be formal and calm.
ReplyDeleteWhile, Mr DeVries's tone sounds as if he is very angry and frustrated. As others have said he did use the word 'dam' in the wrong context which gave it some humor.
In Mr.Tvedten letter replying to Mr.David L Price, District Representative used a tone as in being sarcastic but also serious. He uses the word "Dam" so much in his letter that people take it in as the wrong word of context but no. He uses it in an intellectual way not a direspectful way. He is just trying to get his point recognized by the state that he did not make the dam. He wants them to consider that there are beavers and it is in there nature to build dams.
ReplyDeleteNow obviously Mr.Price has to wright in a businesslike tone because he is speaking in behalf of a formal division. All he has to do is wright a letter stating what codes are being broken, although he does not now about the actual problem going on.
the state officials letter to Mr.Devries is very professional, and respectfull in the way that he uses formal language to get his point across. for not having a permit to build a dam. In Mr.Tvedten letter he sounds rude. Unlike the state official hes sarcastic. he uses the word "dam" alot in the story which makes it sound like he is using it in a inapropiate way but he is just trying to not get blamed for building a dam without permission.
ReplyDeleteDavid L. Price sounds very business like and professional. He keeps a level, serious tone and uses clauses out of the Inland Lakes and Streams, of the Natural Resource and Environmental Protection Act to make his argument stronger. He also subtly suggests the use of force by saying, "Failure to comply with this request, or any further unauthorized activity on the site, may result in this case being referred for elevated enforcement action." He tries to come off as a friend, but a friend that will turn you in if you don't do your job. Also, he blatantly ignores the possibility of wildlife creating or destroying the dam.
ReplyDeleteStephen L. Tvedten on the other hand, sounds very sarcastic and does not hide his intentions as did Mr. Price. He comes out and says that he will contact PETA if necessary because it is not him, but the beavers that are creating these "unauthorized dams". He also brings up a good point by pointing out that the beavers have more of right than him to do anything on that land. So even though Mr. Price's letter sounded more professional and business-like, Mr. Tvedten did a great job of countering the argument with an even stronger argument. Plus, I thought his use of the word, "Dam" over and over to be hilarious and witty. He wrote the letter in a way that it could be forwarded because he purposely used dam instead of the other one, making it not only funny, but brilliant. His feelings come across very bluntly. But I like it haha.
State official David L. Price,had a formal yet professional style;he was calm,percise,and respectful in his writing to Mr. DeVries.
ReplyDeleteAs compared to Mr. DeVries's writting which was veary disrespectful in a sense of his tone and his use of the word "Dam". I do not think that he should have handle the problem exactly that way, he should have been like Mr. Price and took it professional.
David L. Price's letter was professionally speaking in behalf of the state and respectfully warning Stephen L.Tvedten about the dams in the pond and was letting him know about the consequences if he doesn't remove the dam or get a permit.
ReplyDeleteStephen L.Tvedten's letter was the total opposite it was very rude and disrespectful because he use the word DAM many times and also how he was threatening David L. Price about how bears were defecating in the woods and if he didn't do nothing about it that he should watch his step.He also sounded mad because David L. Price mistakenly thought that Ryan DeVries was the land owner.
David L. Price's letter was formal and serious. He was simply telling Mr. Devries about the damage of the dams after the rain. It turns out Stephen L. Tvedten is the real landowner and his letter back was not professional. His tone throughout the story was angry because he believes the beavers have a right to build their dams anywhere. He used the word "dam" which gave the story some humor. At the end of the letter, he wanted the state official to pay less attention to the beavers so he mentioned the bears were doing more harm.
ReplyDeleteDavid Price states his meaning very clearly in his letter to Ryan DeVries. He uses systematic and professional language in order to get his point across - that the two debris dams in Spring Pond are against the law and that unless he acquires a permit for the construction and maintenance of the dams , they must be removed immediately. His tone is is serious and businesslike. The dams are apparently extremely hazardous and he does not want the problem to tarry.
ReplyDeleteThe response to Price's certified letter is written by Mr. Stephen L.Tvedten, the actual legal landowner of Spring Pond. He claims that the two dams were not of his doing - they were the natural causes of beavers setting up shelter. It is evident that he is angry that the blame is being put on him for something that he didn't even do. He uses play-on words and repetition to express his irritation. He is also very rambling. His tone is very sarcastic, yet serious, as the letter demonstrates how he sees the severity of the situation. (There's really nothing David Price can do about the dams if it means having to intrude on the beavers)
In the first letter Mr.DeVires uses a very formal tone. He tells Mr.Tvedten everything that was being violated in an appropriate manor. He was vrey propessional about it.
ReplyDeleteIn the second letter Mr.Price was very starcastic. He used the word "dam" in many inappropriate ways. He seemed very angry at the fact that Mr.DeVires called him out on the violations of the dam. He seemed very offended.
David L. Price wrote a letter to Mr.DeVries to inform him on the issue with the dam and did so in a professional and formal matter. On the other, hand Stephen L. Tvedten replied with an angry and sarcastic letter. He was very angered by Mr. Price's allegations and the repetitive equivocation of the word “dam” made his letter informal and impolite.
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ReplyDeleteThe tone in David Price's letter was very businesslike he stated all the codes that Mr. Stephen was breaking and or violating, unfortunately everything that he was telling Mr. Stephen did not concern him because it turns out he did not build the dam it was two beavers. David Price’s style in the letter was professional and he kept it that way the entire letter.
ReplyDeleteMr. Stephen’s tone of letter was humorous and sarcastic; he kept using the word “dam” over and over to add sarcasm to the letter, letting David Price know that the dams that were built were not made from but by two beavers. The style of his letter was sarcastic and kind of rude.
In the first letter, written by Mr. Price we clearly see that Mr. Price is businesslike w/no personal intentions. He is only doing his job, to inform Mr. DeVries of his unauthorized works. He is not implying anything, instead he is only saying what is needed to be stated. With his last four sentences he is enforcing his authority by threatening to increase "enforcement action".
ReplyDeleteIn the second letter, you can see that Mr. DeVries sounds very offended by Mr. Price's letter. You can see this by the way he responds. He sounds very sarcastic but mostly just ignorant. Mr. Price's job is only to inform the violations DeVries was doing, nothing else. Mr. Price did not care about anything else but the fact that DeVries was working against the law. Evidently, Mr. DeVries is using invalid counterarguments. Thr first letter had nothing to do with the bears, beavers, etc; it was strictly professional.
The real life letters of the interaction Tvedten and Mr.Price is an interesting example of the conflist between nature and man, and what all me must do to protect what they themselves have fought for countless centuries;Freedom.
ReplyDeleteDavid L. Price speaks in a professional style which is the way he should be writing seeing that he is a government official. Price speaks for not only himself but also others, because he mentions "we." Price sound friendly, but also as if he has other things to do and this is not only his case. He shows that he will treat Tvedten with respect, but if he dares to step out of line, or not complete the request by the due date, he will make sure that this case goes to a higher level, meaning that Tvedten will be punished at a greater level.
Steve Tvedten shows that he is not only smart, but also wise. He writes in a very comical style mocking the governmental officials by saying "dam" as not only by the meaning of a structure that holds back the water is the stream, but also to swear or condemn upon. Mr. Tvedten shares that he is not the rightfull owner of the property which is causing this discussion and only the Spring Pond beavers hasve the right to it. He also expreses his view that if the beavers were left alone, then they would not have any catastrophic failure as beavers are known to adapt to their surroundings. The tone of Tvedten is first sarcastic, and then turns into serious as shown in when he tells Mr.Price that he is sending this letter to PETA as well which will also bring this case to a higher level if the government was to intervene with the beavers and the pond making. He openly declares his feelings, and also writes the letter in such a way that is not only persuasive, but also adding a comical sense so the reader does not fall asleep.
the conflict between the two characters is rather unsual. The beginnging letter shows that Mr. Price is very unpleased with the damn and is requesting it to be fixed in a very formal manner. While the other gives a rather rude and ilmannered reply. While one is trying to get something done it seems that the other is speaking in completly sarcastic tone.
ReplyDeleteI think that the angry homeowner has all the right to be angry with the letter sent to him. What was he supposed to do if it was not his fault that the beavers were cutting down the trees and the trees ending up into the streem. The homeowmer writtes in a non-formal way and uses the word dam a lot.
ReplyDeleteThe letter written by the goverment official is a buisness typed letter which it should be no matter how rude the response is. He warns the homeowner if he doesnt solve the problem the goverment official would have to go to exterme measures.
David L. Price uses a professional/formal tone, while trying to explain the issue. He uses details, and examples to support his argument. Immediatly, one can notice this is a person with a professional background and has a good education. His style of writing is explicit leaving no doubt and making his statement very clear.
ReplyDeleteIn the contrary, Ryan DeVries uses a tone of sardonicism, with that being said we can conclude he is upset and does not agree with the idea. His style of writing is informal, states the word "dam" numerous times, and threatens the Department of Environmental Quality which all together sounds like nonsence and very unprofessional.
Well. I thought it was funny how the man responded to the letter. He used dam as refering to damn. I didn't think he was tryna be rud or disrespect towards anyway he just wanted to get his point across. His style would be persuasive and tone would be rhetorical.
ReplyDeleteIn the letter Mr. Price writes has a professional tone. He has a formal writing style. He presents his argument very well and supports it with examples. Also his writing style show that he has expierience in his job that he does. On the other hand, Tvedten tone is very sarcastic and angry. His style of writing is informal. This is shown in the choices of words like "dam" is repeated throughout the letter. Also that his tone is angry in some way because he threatend to send teh letter to PETA.
ReplyDeletethe state official uses professional tone.he is trying to inform that he does not have a permit to built a dam in his property and if he does not remove the "debris" actions will be taken.
ReplyDeleteryan devries is tone is angered because the official is gonna cause damage to the animals for example"the bears are not careful were they dump"he is saying that he is killing the animals and is threatening him on calling peta.
Mr. Price uses a formal tone and it is automatically noticable that he is very professional. He doesn't make it sound personal and he effectively uses an argument with supporting details.
ReplyDeleteMr. DeVries, on the other hand, seems very upset and makes it a more personal matter. He doesn't use any rhetoric or complex sentence structures to make himself sound clever.
The way Mr.Price's style is sort of intellectuall and also serious. His tone in also serious and sarcastic because he uses the word "Dam" almost the whole time and he also said it n a way that wasn't really nesessary. Also Mr.Price was trying to inform Mr.Tvedten that even though he is not the one building the dams Mr.Tvedten should have at least give credit to the beavers because they are naturally born to build Dams.
ReplyDeleteBut in a way Mr. Price had to write to Mr. Tvedten in a formal way, but in a sarcastic way
Mr. Price is formal upon his letter for he is only doing his job to inform the property owner of his action and consequence. He neither threatens nor attacks Mr. DeVries so his tone remains informative throughout the letter. His style in the letter follow a structure that is already set up for this type of situation. His style in writing is strictly business and nothing else; he is straight to the point.
ReplyDeleteThe man who is convinced of Mr. DeVries, Stephen L.Tvedten, is the one who is being adressed to the situation. He replies in a sarcastic tone of the dam beavers by saying "dam" in front of everything. His style of writing is not at all informative because he is responding in almost a humorous way. Although Mr. Tvedten does reply in an immature way, he still gets to the point, but by attacking Mr. Price when all Mr. Price was doing was his job.
The District official kept a very professional, business-like style and tone throughout the letter, stating what the problem was, a reason it was a problem, and the seemingly simple solution. However, his letter was not recieved that way, the response was very ill-mannered. The resident used the word "dam" every other word. The resident was clearly upset in his response, for being blamed about something nature did.
ReplyDeleteMr. Price was by far the most formal of the two subjects. With such a distinct responsibility, Mr. Price had experience in negotiating plans for hose perhaps unwilling to coorperate. His tone can best be described as methodical. If anything, Mr. Price's letter was direct and precise. His style did not differ much; he provided much detailed evidence to get his point across stating there was a violation and it had to be corrected.
ReplyDeleteMr. Tvedten, on the other hand, had a completely relaxed tone. It was obvious that he did have prior knowledge regarding the situation at hand and deliberately used it to his advantage applying statements from laws as Mr. Price did. Mr. Tvedtens style was casually arrogant. In other words, he made a fool out of Mr. Price, by keeping order in a somewhat elaborate manner.
Mr. Price's style was formal he adressed the issue that was at hand. He basically informs Mr. Devrie that the dams constructed were a violation of an act and that he needs a permit for the dams. As for his tone it was informative, because he does not attack Mr. Devrie he just informs of a an act violation and tells Mr. Devrie that the dams need to be torn down.
ReplyDeleteMr. Devries style of writing was more sarcastic. He basically did not care what Mr. Price had to say about the issue stating that the beavers built the dam. Mr. Devries tone was more humurous because, he used the word "dam" several times in his response and made his response flow. He counter attacks Mr. Prices act violations, and threatens to bring PETA into the situation, although Mr. Devrie's response was unprofessional he has a valid point he did not build the dams, the beavers did.
Mr. Price letter is very formal and professional. He talks about the wrong doing of Mr. DeVries (really Mr.Tvedten) with the dams and tells him in a nice and polite manner on how to fix his wrong doing.
ReplyDeleteOn the other hand Mr.Tvedten is very impolite and sarcastic in his reply. The way I notice he is being sarcastic is by his use of "dam" which, has a double meaning. Mr.Tvedten is angry for being blamed about the dams when it was clearly not his fault but the beavers.
Mr. David L. Price's style of writing is incisive because hes is being quick and direct and getting to his point right away. His tone of writing is completely formal and businesslike, the letter Mr. price wrote was to somewhat describe business which was the dam.
ReplyDeleteUnlike Mr. Price, Mr DeVries's style of writing is rambling this is because he starts talking about other issues that don't have anything to do with the Dam. His tone of words are sardonic , he is is using the word "dam" completely out of context a lot, and is often using it as a bad word to prove a point which he is obviously not proving because his style of writing is rambling.
The first letters style is very formal and professional and has a respectful tone to it whereas the landowners style reveals his annoyance and he shows that he is angered by the disruptance of the first letter. And in my opinion the owner sounds offended as if he was disrespected.
ReplyDeleteThe tone from David L. Prices' letter was very professional like. When he addresses to Mr.Ryan DeVries he doesn't comment to him in a personal way, but rather in a business way. As when Stephen replied, it had an angered tone to it. Stephen also used the word 'dam' several times throughout the whole letter. Mr.Tvedten informs David that he is the owner of the property and not Mr. Ryan DeVries, he also points out that he has not been building any dams, its the beavers who built them.
ReplyDeleteThe tone of Mr. Ryan DeVries is very strait forward, and in a way the tone is intimidating, because he knows what he is talking about and brings up a lot of laws that he "violated". Which maybe would cause David L. Prince to maybe stop this Dam building that is being caused by the Dam
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At first while I was reading, David L. Prince's letter i though he was talking out of anger and being sarcastic and i though he was writing the word Dam on purpose, but he talking about doing something about the Dam and naming the things that would help the beavers keep building there Dams. The tone is actually very serious and he feels very strongly about leaving the Dam Beavers in peace to make more dams.
Mr. Prices' tone is very business-like and serious. His style is very precise. We can see this in the way that he gets his point across. He informs Mr. Devries that he needs to either take down the dam or acquire a permit. Mr. Price had no intention in making Mr. Devries upset. Like I said before, his purpose was to inform him.
ReplyDeleteOn the other hand, Mr. Devries' tone is sarcastic and humorous. His intentions are just as important as Mr.Prices', but the only problem is that he uses a "GHETTO" style of writing. Insstead of getting his point across in a proffesional manner, his emotions get in the way. He responded in the heat of the moment. Meaning that he did not think about his response before writing it, but instead went off of what he thought was "dam" right. His sarcasm is shown throughout the letter when he repeatedly uses the word "Dam", when it is clearly unneccessary.
I believe that the first letter is written in a formal ton! Mr. price simply wants to solve the “problem”. I think that the style of this letter is to just get straight to the point. It seems like Mr. price is representing a company. He just wants to conduct him self in a respectable tone and get matters handled.
ReplyDeleteThe second letter seems to have a sarcastic and humorous tone of writing. He is trying to make Mr. price feel like a retard for trying to accuse him of building dams that the beavers built! Mr. Devries knows that he is being blamed for animals way of living. He uses the word “dam” to basically be arrogant and rude bout the situation! His style of writing is much less formal and easier to distinguish.
The tone of the story was very argumentative yet formal to address the issue between Mr. Ryan DeVries and david L. Price, the whole conflict was based on unauthorized activity over beaver dams , and debris where the spring pond was at, Mr. Devries wanted the issue of the dam to be taken care of however Mr.Price was furiouse he believed the beavers should live whereever and it's not a big issue as Mr.devries says it is, he refers to "Dam" as repetition to show how furiouse he is on why it is such a big issue, he even threatens about calling "Peta". The style of the story is well organized to state each side of the argument in conclusion they held a strong opinion on what they belived in.
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ReplyDeletePrice's letter was very serious and professional at the same time. He was not trying to offend Mr Devries in any way, but instead give a polite warning. However Mr Devrie took the letter in somewhat of a personal way, therefore his letter to Mr Price was not in a formal or professional tone. Mr Prices tone was more of an angry (or offended)tone.
ReplyDeleteThe state official is very articulate in the way that he states that the person has biult the dam without a permit. His tone is very buisness-like and serious, because he is trying to make it aware of all the violations. Mr.Devires is offended by the way Mr.prices's letter was written. I think he took it as threatening. In his reply back, he , he is a little sarcastic but also serious because of the anger he has towards the letter. He also uses the word'dam'repeatedly, to be funny but also serious because of his frustration.
ReplyDeleteThe tone of Mr. Price is very professional, serious and direct. He speaks formally and sounds well educated in his letter. Mr. Price also sounds threatening because he tells Mr. DeVries that if he does not fix the problem there will be forceful consequences.
ReplyDeleteThe tone of Stephen L.Tvedten's letter seems to be sarcastic and has a sense of retaliation. He seems angry and is trying to make the point that they are being unjust to the beavers. Stephen still remains serious in stating the facts about the dams and that the permits are unreasonable.
The first letter was from the state official and it had a formal tone. The letter was stright to the point with his problem. This letter was well organized.
ReplyDeleteThe second letter had alot of sense of humor. He uses the word dam throught the letter. Thats why I think it has an angrey tone. The bad word choices that he uses makes his letter seem unprofissonal.
The First Letter is very business like, serious,formal, straight to the point but also very professional. In the first letter Mr.DeVires brings up the laws and how they were violted which can cause the David L. Price to stop the Beavers from making anymore dams. The second Letter used the word "Dam" to much. The second Letter showed that David (landowner)was very angry and annoyed becuse of the first letter that was sent to him. The Landowner seemed serious and seemed that he felt strongly about the beavers and their "Dams".
ReplyDeleteDavid L Price's letter was formal and well written. He really had a well written letter because he states all his points quickly and clearly. His tone was very professional and serious.
ReplyDeleteStephen L.Tvedten's letter was the total opposite to Mr. Price's. In Tvedten's letter he frequently uses the word dam and that causes the letter not to seem so professional. His tone in the letter is like he is attacking Mr. Price.
The states official uses a professional and serious tone. His writing style is very formal. The State Official speaks in respectful and calm way to get to his point or problem. I believe that this shows that the State Official has experience with writing letters like these
ReplyDeleteOn the other hand the landowner shows to be very sarcastic and angry. His form of writing is informal. The landowner uses the word "dam" in the wrong tense to get his point through. In my opinion I find that be very creative and humorous
Price letter was professional and very formal. In his letter he gets right to the point he is trying to make. Tvedten letter was also some what a professional letter. He uses Repetition in the letter, some what making fun of Price's action or what he is trying to do.
ReplyDeleteMr.Price's style of writing is formal,he includes information to his reason behing the letter.As for Mr. Price's tone for the letter I would say that it is a serious,dull,letter that is nothing other than formal.The letter has no informal writing whatsoever and gives off a feeling of high intelligence.
ReplyDeleteDeVrie's style of writing is a sort of mocking type.Devrie is quick to attack one small flaw in the letter repeatedly making Mr.Price sounding less of an intellcint then he really is.As for the tone of the story it sounds informal,only because Devrie uses rhetoric plenty of times.
The States official states his problem throughout his letter with supporting facts and a rather serious tone. Stephen L.Tvedten's letter is rather rude and not so formal not to mention he uses the word "dam" in a wrong sense throughout his letter making himself sound mad.
ReplyDeleteDavid L. Price's letter seemed to be professional and respectful letter. In his letter he never trys to disrespect the reader, he just gets his point across in a professional manner. He's just doing just doing his job but letting him know what can happen.
ReplyDeleteAs apposed to Stephen L.Tvedten's letter, He is very explict and uses the word "dam" alot like if its gona help him get his point accross. On the contrary it makes his letter sound unprofessional. I admit, he maybe is just trying to help the beavers but theres a more proffesional way of dealing with it instead of saying "dam" threw out his whole letter. It makes his letter sound very unproffesional and makes his "professional" talk un professional.
The state official was pretty straight foward. He was talking about how the landowner broke a violation because he didnt have a permit to put dams over the Spring Bridge. His tone sounded like he was accusing the landowner of being irresponsible and putting dams over the bridge without a permit.
ReplyDeleteThe landowner, Stephen, put the word dam in the wrong ways. He kept repeating the word over and over again. The tone of Stephen sounds very angry and fustrated with Mr.Price. Stephen mentioned the bears and that they should worry about how they should persecute them.He said they should leave the beavers alone
to destanie jurica:
ReplyDeletethe spelling in your comment was a little poor, you had great grammer and it was right on topic. your choices for each of their tones and styles was great
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your comment does not explain eithers styles and does not thouroughly explain their tones either. the state officials tone is ok but could be better and mr. tvedten's tone, im sure, could have had some more reason to it.
The first letter by District Representative Price is official and professional. He clearly states what the problem is and what he wants to happen by a certain time. Mr. DeVries has a frustrated and angry attitude in his letter. He often uses double meaning to express his attitude towards the district representative which makes it kind of funny. (ie: "I would like to challenge you to attempt to emulate their dam project any dam time and/or any dam place you choose.")
ReplyDeleteDavid L. Price's letter was very formal and businesslike. He was warning the landowner to get rid of the debris from the stream in Spring Pond. Stephen L.Tvedten, the real landowner, replies back with his own letter. He is angry because the beavers have the right to build their dam anywhere Spring Pond. He is angry and uses the word "dam" a lot throughout his letter to express his feelings about the whole situation which adds humor.
ReplyDeleteMr.DeVries letter uses a formal style and his tone is very dull. DeVries letter is straight foward and very professional. However, Price uses an informal style and a sarcastic tone to describe his frustration toward Mr.DeVries letter. His sarcasm over powers Mr.DeVries formal style. Price is not professional over the topic and his frustration gets in the way of his point.
ReplyDeleteDavid L.Price's letter uses a formal style of writing in which he states his complaint in a very professional way. His tone is informative in which he states what violation codes he has broken. On the other hand Stephen L.Tvedten's letter was more informal and less professional. He was using a furious and sarcastic tone which gets off topic.
ReplyDeleteMr. Price's tone was businesslike,formal and menacing at the same time.The reason I say his tone was menacing is because he was going to take legal action if they didn't did what they were told.Mr. Tvedten's tone was more sardonic because he was bitter throughout the whole letter because of Mr. Price's "request" and constantly mocking him by placing a double-meaning to the word dam.
ReplyDeleteThe first letter's style is very professional and busineesslike it's delivered in a precise and formal way.While,the second letter is very sarcastic often taking out its angered to the first letter and is deliver in a childish way.
David L. Price [District Representative] Takes on a very serious tone in his letter to Mr. Ryan DeVries. He clearly states the steps that need to be taken in order to “restore the stream to a free-flow condition” & specifies dates by which the changes need to be made. I also find the tone of this letter to be maybe just a little condescending & authoritative but maybe that is just because the style is so professional & precise.
ReplyDeleteOn the other hand, Ryan DeVries totally differs in his tone & writing style. He takes a totally different approach in his reply to David L. Price. He still keeps the letter pretty formal but uses, I would say, a bit of a play on words when he uses the word dam. :D [funny stuff] His tone would be very sarcastic & aggravated. He is also very repetitive in his style of writing which clearly shows that he must be pretty annoyed & is trying to get a point across.
David L.Price's letter is very calm and and well written as it should be coming from a state official. He explains what the problem is and what he wants done and also what actions he will take if his needs are not met.
ReplyDeleteStephen L.Tvedten's letter was more of an angry and less professional approach. His use of the word dam was all over the place, making it more of a sarcastic but funny way of responding to a threat.
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ReplyDeleteThe tone in David L. Price's letter is very professional and formal. He precisely states his issue in a business manner and gets to the point. He peacefully warns Mr.Devries about the about the debris in the stream in Spring Pond unless he obtains a permit for it,in which he does not.
ReplyDeleteThe tone in Stephen L. Tvedten's letter is the opposite to the tone of David L. Price's. He states his issue in an unprofessionally and nonchalant way. He seems to be upset and does not like the idea of the removing of the dams. He says it was naturally made by the beavers. Even though Stephen L. Tvedten speaks in a bluntly and offensive way he still propsed his counter arguments and gave good points.
In the first letter, Mr. Price gave his reasons to support his facts. His tone was pure business and serious. He gathered his facts to defend his arguement. He wrote his letter in a formal format and gave verbal warnings to Mr.Tvedten.
ReplyDeleteIn the second letter, Mr. Tvedten made his reasons from his personal perspective. He stated with his emotion and actually used his words as a threat. He used the word "dam" as an insult and gave more factual rights towards Mr. Price.
Both letters contained their point of view and gave good arguements. It also showsed that both letters had different tones, but towards the end, both letters ended promptly from their perspective.
The state official's letter is brief and to the point, so he had a succinct style. His letter is professional and formal, so his tone is businesslike.
ReplyDeleteThe frustrated homeowner used homonyms to express profane laguage in a ironic way. That shows his bombastic style. He uses mockery in reply to the other man's request by accusing a mammal instead of tacking the blame. That shows his sardonic tone.
Mr. DeVries, in the first article, has a very professional tone and a businesslike aura. He has an explicit style of writing, explaining every part of the problem and noting every detail of importance.
ReplyDeleteOn the other hand, Mr. Price has a humorous way of explaining his views on the issue in question. By his constsnt use of the word dam, his aura is percieved as joking, but he also, like Mr. DeVries, explains his views and makes his side known, although not in the same way as the latter.
MORBAN: you are right on both, but you are missing something. On Price's view, you state the tone, but not the style. As for Tvedten's view, you state his style, but not his tone. o.O
ReplyDeleteBRENDA M.: Your response was very well written and I agree with your response.
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ReplyDeleteI think that Mr. Price was very proffesional and formal, while Mr. DeVries was not. He wrote this letter in a more offensive tone, and even used the word dam in a offensive and improper way, therefore it was wrong for him to respond the way he did.
ReplyDeleteto CURLY KAREN (: I like how you said Mr. Price's tone was condescending. It's because it's TRUE! I never really noticed until you pointed it out. Overall, I definitely agree with your response.
ReplyDeleteto SANDY (: I also agree with your response. I like how you said the tone for the second speaker was sardonic. It's the perfect word to describe Mr. Tvedten's tone.
to: SANDY5118: Your comment was great. Loved the way you described each writer. ALthough I'm pretty sure the way he used "dam" was more funny than incorrect. luv ya sansan =)
ReplyDeleteto"EASTWOODGOLF: So your comment was excellent. Although I must say that Mr. Prices purpose was to simply state what he was Mr.Devries was doing incorrectly. For that matter, he did not care whether or not the beavers had more right to do whatever they please with the land. Lastly I loved the way you stated how the repetition of "dam" was witty.
To:Eastwoodgolf
ReplyDeleteI do agree with you on what you said "He did a great job of countering the argument with an even stronger argument." and it was veary funny on how many times he said "Dam" But i still think that he should have approach his problem
a differnt way
To:Brenda
i liked your writting and how you told it straght forward and how it was.
To: Alex
ReplyDeleteYou had a nice comment. I agree with you when you said that the first letter was very professional. I thought the same thing when i read the letter.
to: JANNA[banana]
ReplyDeletehaha I totally agree with your comment on this assignment. I like the fact that you recognized the play on words & used the term specifically[just like me! twinzz! XD] & how you noticed the repetition which totally contributes to the tone.
to:SANDRA<3
Good job sandra my dear. I agree with comment concerning the tone of the letters. It was really businesslike at first and then you can so tell the other guy gets all angry about being told what to do with HIS property.
good job to the both of you guys<3
to Sahara: i think that your comment was very well written and i agree completely with you :) but i dont think that the second letter was serious at all. he seemed to be very humorous and basically just trying to make fun of the guy acusing him.
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ReplyDeletei think ediths analysis of the two letters was simply marvelouse! she explained both letters in a short but depth way! i agree completely about what she said. the second letter was very rude and yes the word 'dam' was very unessasary.
!!PHENOMINAL JOB EDITH JIMENEZ!!
@edith:chose some of the best tones and stylen to describe both letters and explains each of her picks really briefly but well done. Also i agree with your comment on the second letter
ReplyDelete@sandy5118: Very well explained blog i specially liked how you pulled out some of the most important subjects talked about in the dam letter and using them to explain why you chose the style and tone.
@ANGIE: I agree with everything that you said but I think that what Ryan was saying was kind of funny even thought I do think it was unprofessional.
ReplyDelete@Jacqueline: you did not put a space between the word “landowner” and the word “for”
@Maria
ReplyDeleteI agree with you that the first letter was formal, even if we didn't hear him speak. You could have provided examples why you thought the letter was formal. Overall you did a good job stating what each letter was.
@Bhavin Jindal
I agree with your statement. I like how in the beginning you compared the situation to nature and man. Another thing that was interesting about your comment, was that for the second letter you didn't put he was angry, or upset with Mr.Price, you wrote "He writes in a very comical style mocking the governmental officials by saying "dam"...".
@Lizbeth: I agree with your comments on both letters. I like how you briefly explain why you think the tone is what it is. (There are some grammer mistakes you should look over.)
ReplyDelete@Quadree: I agree with what you wrote for each authors tone and attitude. I would kind of disagree that the first letter was a state warning not a threat. Threat sounds more harsh.
TO: Angie(:
ReplyDeleteYour comment was by far the most simplistic yet effective.It is obvious that you read the documents adequately enough to grasp the main concepts. I completely agree with your thoughts on both subjects' tone and style. Your my inspiration(:
TO:ernesto
Your statement does somewhat make sense. However,your words of choice make it almost impossible to read through. Also, your uncertainty, "sort of" and "in a way" creates a breeding ground for confused readers. Not to mention, what happened to Mr. Tvedten?
@Alex: I agree with your comments about the letters, you support your comments with examples from the story.
ReplyDelete@Bhavin Jindal: I agree with what you said, your comment explains the document thoroughly with lots of details.
To: Janna
ReplyDeleteI agree with you comment that David Prince is serious and businesslike. The dams are apparently extremely hazardous and he does not want the problem to tarry.- I like how you backed your information up.
To:Jenny
I also do believe both letters agreed well in there own way, they are both convincing, but i believe Mr.DeVries letter is more convincing well to me.
To: Curly Karen(:
ReplyDeleteI agree with what you say and I especially like the fact that the official is trying to be too professional, but also trying to get his point across without being too mean.
To: Janna(:
I also agree on your statement because you point out the irritation of the landowner because she rambles and is very repetitve!
To: ernesto(:
ReplyDeleteI agree on what you have to say about the beavers, it's not their fault! I also agree on what andrew says about using uncertain words like "sort of" and "in a way" this will often confuse the readers. I also believe you might have some parts of the characters mixed up.
To:Lena(:
I agree with you on both parts of the letter. Your comment was short and straight to the point making it very easy to understand. I also thought it was kind of amusing how the angry landowner was using the "dam" in a double tense.
To Angie:
ReplyDeleteI agree with you on the anyalsis you did on both the letters. Well I like how you explain why the tone and style were that in the letters. Angie you have great grammer skills and a good vocabulary.
To Amy H.
I totaly agree with you that the state official has a perfessional tone. Also that landonwer has a angry tone and sarcastic tone almost as if mocking the state officials.
The stlye of of this letter is very precise, because his language is very firm the words he chose were good. He used those words so the person reading this would know that he is firm in what he is saying. This makes someone want to read it,and analyze vit. The tone was strong because he felt confident in what he was writing. If he was telling him in person he'd know that he strong in what he is saying,and not to mess with him or the beavers.
ReplyDelete@josh
ReplyDeleteI agree that he did you the dam alot but he did it to defend himself, but in a rude way,i just noticed that. He should wrote back to him in a nice respectful way.
To: Angie
ReplyDeleteI agree on you comment Mr. Price did use he word wisely and in a professional way. That does show he is a very well educated man ("
to jessicaoliver032208: I completely agree with you, but i realized that you forgot to do one of the letters. there was two.
ReplyDeleteto Amy: I love your response. it is great and very thorough. i give it an A++
To Angie:
ReplyDeleteI agree with you that Mr DeVries was using unproffesional language he was defendnig himself from the criticism from Mr. Price. There was truly no one to blame for the condtions and on the dam. Mr. D. had the right to defend himself but maybe in a more professional matter.
To Jasmen B:
Yes Mr. Price's letter was rather formal. He did actually give all blame to Mr. DeVries. Mr. DeVries language in his reply was rather humorous because he found a sort of clever way to offend Mr. Price as Price did to him in the letter before.
To Itzel:
ReplyDeleteI semi agree wiyh you on your comment. I agree that the state official had to writte in a formal way in everything that he says. Good use of spelling except for the word wright which you misspeled in couple of occassions.
TO ANGIE:
I aagree in everything you described in your comment. The state official uses the proper words and the writting style that he uses. Good work.
TO ERIC B.: i agree with you in that the stat official was formal and boring and i agree when you say the landowner was mocking the official. I also think he was just exasperated and annoyed.
ReplyDeleteTO LIZBETH: i completely agree with you and i really like how you said he was "menacing" the landowner. i didn't take that into consideration but that's a very good point.
To Alonso Corrujedo: I agree with everything you said. You did a good job explaining the the tone and style of the first letter. I disagree on the second letter though the second lettr must have been humurous to us but was directed to Mr. Price as an angry letter. You should also see that Mr. Devries did not write the response it was Mr Tvedten who wrote the response.
ReplyDeleteTo diana: i agree with you. The landowner was very angry for being blamed for something he had no control over.
To josh i agree with you when u say that the he is using formal writting as well as when us say that mr. tvedten is using a sarcastic tone as well as angry to speak his mind about mr.price's is letter
ReplyDeleteto jenny i agree with ur perpective and they way that you say that mr.price got all his research as well as mr tvedten is threatening mr.price
To jacqueline:
ReplyDeleteI agree on how you said David Price's letter was professional and straight foward also that Price had a serious and bussiness like tone.
I also agreed on what you said about Stephen that he tranferred some of the anger into sarcastic/rude humor towards the state offical.
To Alex:
I agree on what you said about David L. Price using formal and respectful language and how His tone is very professional
I agree on what you put about stephen's language of how it was offensive and it makes him look ignorant.
I disagreed about what you said of the landowner has all the right to be angry with the letter sent to him because he should have got a permit before anything.
@Casandra:
ReplyDeleteI agree with you that Mr.Tvedten should not have handled the situation the way he did, because Mr. Price was very professional and did not attack him. In addition, the one that responded to Mr. Price was not Mr.DeVries it was Mr.Tvedten. Mr. Price thought that the land belonged to Mr. DeVries, but it actually belongs to Mr.Tvedten.
@Edith:
I think that you are right about how Mr.Tvedten let his emotions get in the way of his point coming across; he should have been more respectful. I also, liked the way you included the word “dam” into your comment.
To Lisette: I think its was very clever of you to mention PETA, though that did not catch my attention while reading now i see how it fits in to the story.(:
ReplyDeleteTo Stepahnie: I Reallly like how you mention the frusturation of the homeowner as ironic while he was trying to dialogue(:
To: Amy H:) I liked your perspective based on the story, and how u compared and contrast the land owner and state officials, they each addressed the situations differently however i think the lanwoner refers " dam" as repetion to make an emphasis on why it such a big issue. p.s I LIKE PANDAS XD
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I think you had a a good outlook of each character i agree with you on how they act and such, your tone of the story went overall great!
@quadree. i do agree with you on both of your descriptions.one concern that i have is that you used the word "and" twice in a sentence.
ReplyDelete@josh. in the second letter he did not use the word "dam" in the wrong sense.he wrote it that way for a purpose. it is ok though, everyone makes mistakes.hehehe
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ReplyDeleteto stephanie: Your response is very well spoken and correct. i like how you describe the homeowner as making a mockery because that is exactly what he does.
ReplyDeleteto berenice: I think that you are right, Stephen L. Tvedtens latter is rude and he responds with anger instead of approaching it appropriatly.
@Alejandra
ReplyDeleteI agree with what you said about the second letter being sarcastic, because of the informal language being used.
@Brenda
I think that you were right about the first letter being professional and the second letter being rude and unprofessional.
I think that the first dam letter was kindof serious and straight foward like giving a command. its tone was serious. its basically telling someone to stop the dam construction.in the second letter the person who is in charge of the dam contruction was kind of being sarcastic thruogh out the letter, by using bears as an example.the person was basically saying that he/she will not stop the construction bacause he/she thinks it is not right to do that to the beavers.
ReplyDeleteto Mauricio. I agree with you. I think that it was formal and Mr.Price addressed the issue at hand. The dams were a violation.
ReplyDeleteto brenda. I agree with you also. Stephen, the landowner, replied with an angry and sarcastic letter. His use with the word 'DAM'was sarcastic and in a way impolite
To Marissa: I like how you said they both had a strong opinion and for Mr. Price to get so angery was unprofessional.
ReplyDeleteTo Diana: I think you are right that the landowner was offened. He most likely respects the lives of animals very much.
To Sandy5113: I agree with you about Mr.Price having a well organized statement.The land owner used the word dam incorrectly on purpose.
ReplyDeleteTo: Diana I believed Mr.price was accusing more than respectful to the land owner.
@ sandy 5118:
ReplyDeleteI like your reasons and i agree with everything you said. I like how you support you reasons with facts from the story.
PS. Thre is nothing spelled wrong, the tilte is like that to make it more humorous.
@ Edith J.
I loved how you described both characters. Your comment also made me laugh. I liked how you throw the word "ghetto" in there. Very discriptive. Keep up the good work.;
To Itzel: i agree with you about how the Landowner used the word "Dam" to many times and in the wrong usage of context, but i do not agree with you when you said that the landowner used it in an intellectual way.
ReplyDeleteTo Amy H.: I like the way how you explained that the State official was just trying to explain in a nice way to the Landowner about the the beavers and the Dam.
To Janna: Grawesome Job!(that is an insider for those of you wondering what "grawesome" is) I agree with what you said about the dam being hazardous showing that David Price cared about the health of the community.
ReplyDeleteTo J.C.: Wow... You wrote a lot. I like how you backed up both mens' arguments with information. Good job buddy.
To Lena: GOOD JOB LENA!!! I completely agree with all of your responses and like the way they are presented. The qoute on the second letter(the one that you listed on your comment) also made me laugh.
ReplyDeleteTo Edith:I agree with you all the way and love how you compare Mr. Devries' writing style to a ghetto writing style.
to sandy:i agree in how you said he uses a formal language in order to get his point that the person has not issued a permit to build the dam.
ReplyDeleteto jasmine:i agree in what you said about mr.devries he attitude seems very upset and makes it a personal thing.
@eastwoodgolf: I agree with what you have stated in your comments. Price and Tvedten do indeed have different ways of speech. I think the reason that David Price accused Mr. Devries was that David Price may not have know about the possibility of wildlife. How many times do we think of stuff before it happens? However, it was very fun to read this story.
ReplyDelete@Edith Jimenez: I agree with what you commented about Mr. Price, he was indeed businesslike and professional. However, I disagree with the statement you made about Mr. Devries. To me he sounded very professional. Yes, he did have a different style of talking however, I do not think it was “Ghetto.” I think the essay was very serious, though he did add a hint of comedy. The essay had to be well thought as he used the word “dam” in the right places, and not just randomly. The reason he used “dam” was to not only convey of the building of the dam, but also to not bore the reader to death. While it was not unnecessary, it did make the essay interesting enough for us to be here not only reading it, but also commenting on it.
Hey Sandy! I love what you said about the formal language on the first letter. I happen to agree with you and think that what you said is what I was going to put but then I saw your blog and said Oh Well! :)
ReplyDeleteHey Quadree. I completely agree with your views. I do, however, think that your use of the word threat in the last paragraph is unnecessary because it wasn’t really meant as a threat. It was just a warning, like Lena said. Great job otherwise!:)
ReplyDeleteTO QUADREE: I agreed with your comment and liked how you commented about what they wrote about and why, but I just wish that you would've elucidated a little more about hidden motives and what exactly they wrote about. Oh and I wouldn't consider the first letter an actual threat. While he did say that if it wasn't cleaned up be a certain date that more action may be needed, this doesn't make the letter one big threat and shouldn't be thought of as such. I commented on mine saying that there is a hidden threat because it is well hidden between the "I want to help you" stuff. I think that I'm just trying to say that if you are going to sum up the first letter in just one word, it should not be a threat, like how you put it in your second paragraph. All in all, it's a very good comment and again, I like how you got to the point right off the bat and didn't stray. Short, sweet, and to the point.
ReplyDeleteTO JOSH: I agree with you totally about Mr. Price. He wrote it in a very formal, business-like way and supported his argument well with clauses from the current compilation of environmental laws in the state of Michigan. I also like how you noted that he wrote in such a way that nowhere in the letter did he sound like he was personally involved. He was writing as a representative. Not as an individual. I, however, do not agree with your comments on Mr. Tvedten. He did not use the word "dam" in the wrong sense. He was very smart to have used "dam" in the sense that he did. You also mentioned that Mr. Price accused him of building the dam when it was really the beavers. I don't know if this is the point that you were trying to get across, but it seemed to me like you were saying that he was angry that Mr. Price had accused him when he should be off yelling at beavers building dams and cleaning after pooping/defecating bears haha. And while I think that yes, he was mad about being accused, he was trying to protect the beavers that are the actual culprits in this mystery.
Oh and sorry guys, I changed my name from eastwoodgolf to this one.
Hey Josh-I like the way you pretty much said it all in a short simple manner.i agree with you in both letters. Good job man! :)
ReplyDeleteHey Alonso- I think you did an outstanding job. You analized the essays just perfectly,i agree with you on both essays how Mr.Prince is respecting his company and just doing his job. As i also agree on you in the second letter that this guy is just being rude and arrogant and sounds pretty dumb. one edvice i would give you is that your put (bout) considered slang so i would be more carefull with the slang talk. other than that you did a marvalous job
GOOD JOB JOSH AND ALONSO!! :)
i believe mr.Devries sounded very professional and sort amore like businesslike(: He had a more formal way of writing and he like noticed every little detail.
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mr price was more a chill guy he had more humour on his character one reason was the use of dam which was funny :p and was takin as a joke but they both showed thier side and had good arguements and both showed that they could handle the situation idk if i make sense lmao(:
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TO jerimiah i agree wit yew 100% good job like price kept sayin 'dam' and it put some sarcasm in his arguement (^_^) goo job(:
ReplyDeleteTO jessica i like how u said urs short and simple one was all sacarstic and the other was more like chill and i like how u phrased it how they both had arguementz and one was formal and the other wanted to do it(: very GOOD JOB (^.^)
to edith: i liked how you described the writer's style as "ghetto" in the 2nd letter.
ReplyDeleteto eastwoodgolf: i agree the word "dam" makes the story hilarious and witty and the story was brilliant.
(posting as Viridiana Avila)
ReplyDeleteWhen Mr. Price send the letter in his letter he was very respectful, in the way that he let Mr Ryan it Mr. Stephen know what the Unauthorized Activity was. But in the other hand Mr. Stephen L. Tuedten was really disrespectful, did let Mr. Price know how he felt in a good way but in a bad way.
(posting as Viridiana Avila)
ReplyDeleteI do agree in how Christopher says the the letter is really formal in the meaning of company when he really explicits himself it gives straight facts to Stephen L. Tuedten about the dams in the pond
I also agree what Itzel says that Mr. Tvedten's letter replying to Mr. Price, uses a tone of being sarcastic and serious. In the way that he uses Dam to much it also in how he shows no respect.
@sahara:
ReplyDeleteI like the way you used the big word articulate. I wishi could think of big words like that. I agree that Mr. Price is trying to state the violations but he shouldn't have threatened to involve law enforcement without knowing the full situation which is why Mr. Devires was so offended. That gave him the right to be sarcastic.
@edith jimenez:
I disagree that Mr. Devires letter was "GHETTO," as you put it. Although his anger did take over, he shouldn't have to be professional when he's being falsely accused for something he didn't do. But you are right about him over using the word dam.
@ Teresa
ReplyDeleteI support Teresa's statements made about Mr.DeVries,he does retaliate by using repitition torwards Mr.Price.Mr.DeVries also sounds as if he is also mocking Mr.Price for stating something as ridiculous as beavers needing permission from the land owner to build something.
@josh
ReplyDeletei agree with josh,but i believe that the reason Mr.DeVrie is aggravated by Mr.Price is that his demands sound ridiculous,and Mr.Price was not fully aware of what was going on.So being falsely accused of building or given permission to build that is what really angered him.
@Lisbeth Torres: I agree with what you said about Mr. Prices tone was all Professional and what not.
ReplyDelete@Malenny Hernandez: Everything was great the only problem was that you got the writers mixed up.
To Jose: I agree with you about the witers tones and styles.
ReplyDeleteTo Lizbeth: I also agree with your choice of words describing the writers.
To Sahara: I agree what you are saying about the state officials tone being very business like because he is trying to make the violations aware to Mr.Devries.
ReplyDeleteTo Berenice: I agree that the second letter is not formal because of the way that the word dam is used in the wrong sense.
Jeremiah: Hey my ninja I agree with your comment of the "Dam letters". Mr. Stephens was using the word "Dam" inappropriately. He was being very sarcastic. Dam this dam that dam dam dam dam. Like dam stop saying dam. YOu feel me. Okay smell you later.
ReplyDeleteNickey: According to my calculations i profoundly agree with your input about these "dam letters". You Go girl. Keep it up your making your twin bro pround : ).. Your growing up so fast.
P.S. Ms.MAENPAA now before you judge me,i know its late but see what happen was i had to attend to some other very portentous "ENRICHMENT"
To alonzo gomez:)i agree with your comment that the letter was well written and formal. it was also proffesion and serious. but in the second response the word dam made it unprofessional
ReplyDeleteTO quadree:) i agree that ariculate is big word for my vocab:) but i also agree with your quote that the usage of the word "dam" made the response funny/sarcastic and it was a way of responding to a threat..
To: Vjunnia
ReplyDeleteI agree with both tones from both letters. It also amuses me that you said 'dam' and how sarcastic the writer was.
To: Alejandra
Your post was well stated. It had both the style and tone. Maybe a little more detail for the second letter, but overall good job! (:
@ Angie: I agree with everything you say in your response. You explained your reasoning very well.
ReplyDelete@ SAHARA: I agree with your response, I agree with what u have to say about Mr. Devrie and Mr Price.
Mr. Price's writing was formal throughout the whole letter. He was serious and really wants them to listen to his comments.
ReplyDeleteOn the other hand, Stephen looked like he had an attitude toward Mr. Price and didn't seem really friendly.
To: Edwin9
ReplyDeleteI agree with you he did use the word dam too much he needs to know more words.
To: Enrique
You are write with your opinion on it but you need to spell better
To: Jessica
I agree with what you say...
The "The Dam Letter" is organized in a way that it may be well read;it is organized by the reader.Also, i believe that Mr.Prince wrote "Dam" towards the end to prove a point.They also stay on topic and reply well to each other about what they feal what has to happend. Finally, this also shows how both want to state whta they both want.
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ReplyDeleteBerenice- I agree with Bernice that Stephen L. Tvedten is rude towards the end because he uses a incorrect word in the letter and that was suppose to be a formal letter.
Morban-I also agre with Morban that this letter was professional and formal but it did have its not so good parts as when they use a inapropiate word for a formal letter. :)
He is being polite and not tryinmg to be rude in anyway.He is making important and wants to solve the problem. He also seems worried what te problem is.
ReplyDeleteTo Miguel-I agree with you he does take his business serious.
ReplyDeleteTo Marlyn- I agree with you and I like how you gave examples from the letter.
No one has posted on this one in a while. Well let's see how long it takes for someone to read this. If you read this, you instantly earn 15 cool points and are a member of the "I Like to Party Club". But to become a part of the group, you have to type, "Nose Goes" under this and you have to tell me nose goes at school with your finger touching your nose for you to officially become a member of the club. Now let's see who joins lol
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